Armagada Judgments

Judging Results

Total Results all judges - Worldwide

character		Total
Ammelath	=	1300
Astra	=	620
Carlton	=	560
Korath	=	1090
Lúthien	=	1325
Rowanfury	=	0
Tamuril	=	625
Woodstrike	=	480

Keenness and Zeal = Sandy. Toronto, Canada

character		Total
Tamuril	=	100
Korath	=	150
Woodstrike	=	100
Rowanfury	=	0
Lúthien	=	100
Ammelath	=	200
Astra	=	150
Carlton	=	200

Quality and Standards = Hilary. Minneapolis, Minnesota.

character		Total
Ammelath	=	325
Astra	=	250
Carlton	=	250
Korath	=	350
Lúthien	=	325
Rowanfury	=	0
Tamuril	=	250
Woodstrike	=	250

Rock and Role = TheGun. Newcastle - upon - Tyne

character		Total
Ammelath	=	100
Astra	=	0
Carlton	=	0
Korath	=	300
Lúthien	=	600
Rowanfury	=	0
Tamuril	=	0
Woodstrike	=	0

Law and Order = Bill Krebs Cary, North Carolina.

character		Total
Ammelath	=	150
Astra	=	100
Carlton	=	100
Korath	=	200
Lúthien	=	150
Rowanfury	=	0
Tamuril	=	200
Woodstrike	=	100

Fun and Gamesmanship = Medina. Miami, Florida.

character		Total
Ammelath	=	625
Astra	=	20
Carlton	=	10
Korath	=	90
Lúthien	=	150
Rowanfury	=	0
Tamuril	=	75
Woodstrike	=	30

Ammelath

Fun & Gamesmanship - Ammelath - Tiefling~~625 points

Fabulous graghics! Love the uniform of Ammelath too. Having a gift of gab is a great thing to have!
I loved your {{Gifts}} section too. Hey..I used 'love' twice already, I <BR>think you will be gotting some big points!

Keenness and Zeal - Ammelath:
You have the best background story of the lot. I love a good mystery, and you've set up one that intrigues me. I look forward to seeing you resolve your quest for identity. The use of a third party to introduce yourself and to provide a certain amount of perspective was a nice touch. 200 xp.

Quality & Standards - Ammelath

• Strengths.

Both the storytelling and the visual artistry are exceptional, and your layout is clear and easy on the eyes.

• Growth Areas.

Please do not use copyrighted images without permission and credit.

• XP Awards. — 325 pts

§ Achievement: Completed.
§ Clarity and Layout:
I'm not usually fond of long stretches of colored text, but it works to distinguish Ammelath's viewpoint from that of her player. The headers are functional in addition to being ornamental, and I found that I could scan the page easily for what I need. My only complaint was that I would have preferred it if the majority of the text was not centered.
§ Visual Artistry: The page is gorgeous, no doubt about it. The images all evoke Ammelath's fiery nature, and they go very well together.

Now for a more difficult concern. I am Quality & Standards, not Law & Order, so I may be straying out of my assigned area. So be it.

I note that while it is perfectly in character for rogues to steal, copyright infringement is a different matter. There are certain coastal wizards that get downright testy about such things. Since one of your images looks like it was taken directly from the players handbook, you might want to request WotC's permission for its use.

I do suggest that you look over the following: 10 Big Myths About Copyright Explained.
§ Storytelling:
Ammelath's story is an interesting one, and I did enjoy seeing it from both from her view and from a more objective standpoint. You did an excellent job of showing us both perspectives, and your layout was a pleasure.
§ Bonus Points:

For the most part, a lot of creativity has gone into providing adequete background for these characters so judging them on effort was not a priority for me rather I chose to judge them based on flare and attraction; basically the players ability to sell their character.
100 XP to Ammelath
I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.
Rowanfury

__Fun & Gamesmanship - Rowanfury - Centaur 0 Points__


__Keenness and Zeal - Rowanfury:__ Less is not always better. 0xp.


__Quality & Standards

· Rowanfury__

o Strengths -- Unusual brevity.
o Growth Areas -- Alas, "edit this" did not grab me as a character story. (Unless of course Rowanfury feels that phrase is a metaphor for his life, and serving as his primary character motivation.)
o XP Awards

No content, no points.


__Rock & Role__


I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.

!!Lúthien

__Fun & Gamesmanship - Lúthien - Elf~~~150 points__

Good job with letting Ileandra tell your tale! Thank you for the visual of
Lúthien! Where does he get his hair done? Yours is like a mini book with well
palced chapters. Easy reading and easy on the eyes!

Oh no..not another sword! Nice ending using the black and green!



__Keenness and Zeal - Luthien:__ Your writeup defined your motivations, desire for revenge, and clearly illustrated who your opponents (and friends!) are dealing with. The picture was a nice touch as well. A good, blood-curling web page. The use of a 'third person' to describe you was novel, and the banter at the end also captured your character nicely. 100 xp.


__Quality & Standards
· Lúthien__

o Strengths. This page is simply lovely to look at. While I'm not certain what the mage at the top has to do with your character, it is very, very pretty.
o Growth Areas. Not much. Just fix those overlarge images and don't center everything.
o XP Awards. -- 325pts

§ Achievement: Completed.
§ Clarity and Layout: Overall, this page was a delight for the eyes, and very well organized. You used both headers and border images to increase this page's legibility.

This image and this image are both 800 pixels wide, and are causing your page to have an unsightly horizontal scroll that is also making it slightly more difficult to read.

I will give you some leeway on this, because I note that the official guide to using images on Meetup is not completely clear that you need to be under 800 pixels to avoid the scroll. (Hmmph. I shall have to have words with the guide's creator about this oversight.) If you reduce the image to 799 pixels (or less) you should solve this problem quite easily.

Another note. I would prefer it if everything was not centered, just the images and headers.
§ Visual Artistry: Exceptional. Your images harmonize very nicely with one another.
§ Storytelling: I really love the conceit of having the character speak to us directly, and then the shift into the more objective information. The first gives us a taste of the character's personality. The second lets us know some things that maybe he wouldn't have said openly. The story itself is quite dark, but wonderfully told. I really feel like I was inside your character's head.
§ Bonus Points:

__Rock & Role__

For the most part, a lot of creativity has gone into providing adequete background for these characters so judging them on effort was not a priority for me rather I chose to judge them based on flare and attraction; basically the players ability to sell their character.
600 XP to Lúthien
I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.



!!Carlton

__Fun & Gamesmanship - Carlton - Elf~~~10 points__

I wish there could have been a little more ooomph in your {{Upbiringing and
Cuerno}} sections. I need more!!!



Keenness and Zeal - Carlton: You get points for coordination with Astra's story. You've fleshed out the library well, and have painted a picture of a mentor and father figure. Carlton is not flashy, but he plays a pivotal role in bridging the gap between the two groups. You get the award for 'best teamwork'. 200 xp.



__Quality & Standards
· Carlton__

o Strengths. Clarity of layout, and librarian logo.
o Growth Areas. I really know almost nothing of Carlton's personality here. Who is he? What does he really dream about? What does he fear? Also you should probably link to your other character's page in your story, since finding him was so pivotal.
o XP Awards. -- 250pts.

§ Achievement: Completed.
§ Clarity and Layout: Excellent clarity. I like the idea of bolding key points.
§ Visual Artistry: The logo is well done but I would not mind another image of books or swords or something else that represents your character.
§ Storytelling: Your story is a clear retelling of key points, but I would like a bit more character motivation please.
§ Bonus Points: Once again, I enjoyed the link to the bonus page for more information.



__Rock & Role__

For the most part, a lot of creativity has gone into providing adequete background for these characters so judging them on effort was not a priority for me rather I chose to judge them based on flare and attraction; basically the players ability to sell their character.
I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.


!!Korath

__Fun & Gamesmanship - Korath - Half-Ogre-Mage~~~90 points__

Very dark..I like how you have some ying and yang between your dark story and
the lighter graghics! I like orange too and orange robes are great!



__Keenness and Zeal - Korath:__ I think you must be in a competition with Luthien to produce the darkest and most depressing background ? how ever do you get out of bed in the morning? Well written, pleasant to look at, and one of the first pages to be placed on the web page. Extra points for the cheesecake. 150 xp.


__Quality & Standards
· Korath__

o Strengths. Korath, you did exceptional storytelling here. I got a wonderful sense of your tragic past, your motivations, and your personality. In addition, I loved how well all the images in your story harmonized with one another, and the recurrence of orange and black was a good reminder of both the darkness and the monk training you have had.
o Growth Areas. At some point, I'd love a picture of you, but I understand that you are quite shy about your appearance.
o XP Awards. -- 350pts total

§ Achievement: Completed.
§ Clarity and Layout: Hmmph. Didn't you just hear me lecture Tamuríl on the use of Century Gothic? My objections to this font choice still stand! You are both fortunate that I had a good supply of paper in my printer...
§ Visual Artistry: Exceptional. This page was a treat to view.
§ Storytelling: I loved hearing your story told in your own voice, Korath. You spared us nothing, and I got a wonderful feel for who you are and where you have come from. I also felt touched by your darkness and despair.
§ Bonus Points: Inclusion of the miniature image was a lovely touch. Much appreciated.


__Rock & Role__

For the most part, a lot of creativity has gone into providing adequete background for these characters so judging them on effort was not a priority for me rather I chose to judge them based on flare and attraction; basically the players ability to sell their character.
300 XP to Korath
I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.


!!Tamuril

__Fun & Gamesmanship - Tamuril - Elf ~~~75 points__

Guess what you scored huge points on? The beautiful graphic and rocks! Don't
worry I liked your story too! Good thing you relieved so many points on your
fun graphic, because the ol' pass down the family sword thing didn't get too
much! oh...I did love the hand scripted alphabet!



__Keenness and Zeal - Tamuril__, your page was the most aesthetically pleasing of the pages I reviewed. A lot of story depth, and you have captured the flavor of your culture and people nicely. Your creation of the link between your family and the Cuerno was a nice touch. Extra points for the section breaks (I have a love of small stones!). 100 xp.



__Quality & Standards
· Tamuríl__

o Strengths. You did a wonderful job exploring your family background.
o Growth Areas. I can see that heritage is very important to you, Tamuríl, and you are right to be proud of it. Still, I'd also like to know more about who you are aside from that heritage. What skills have you discovered? What is your dearest dream? What concerns you?
o XP Awards.-- 250pts

§ Achievement: Completed.
§ Clarity and Layout: This gnome notes that Century Gothic font is both smaller and lighter than Meetup's default text. Please, be kind to my aging eyes, and understand that this choice made your page virtually unreadable to me on the web. (YES, I had to print it out... on paper. This made QS a cranky gnome. You do not wish to deal with cranky gnomes, do you? I thought not.)

If you must use Century Gothic, I suggest increasing the size to 3, and maybe even bolding it for increased legibility.

You had:
My name is Tamuríl Séregon.

Here it is increased to size 3, and bolder:
My name is Tamuríl Séregon.

Ah... My old eyes feel better already!
§ Visual Artistry: The logo is very nice, but I am unsure about the appropriateness of the stones as a border image. Do the stones have anything to do with your story? Are they special to your family?
§ Storytelling:
§ Bonus Points: This gnome loved the inclusion of the photograph of your miniature! Very nice touch.


__Rock & Role__

For the most part, a lot of creativity has gone into providing adequete background for these characters so judging them on effort was not a priority for me rather I chose to judge them based on flare and attraction; basically the players ability to sell their character.
I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.


!!Astra

__Fun & Gamesmanship - Astra - Half-Elven~~~20 points__

Astra had as we call here a 'Mr. Toads WILD Ride' in the beginning of his
life! Thank you for being very clear with your subheads!

I like how you had Astra broke off and they could not do any more for him.
They were probably tired of him dog earring the books!



__Keenness and Zeal - Astra:__ The amount and quality of information that you provided was impressive. The tale of your parents tragic romance captured my interest, Likewise, the tale of the tattoo and the Library have me interested ? was Astra fated to be a member of this organization? You have me hooked ? extra points for being one of the two players 'first out of the gate'. 150 xp.


__Quality & Standards
· Astra__

o Strengths. This gnome admits a shameless soft spot for librarians, so I was predisposed to like this page. Quite fortunately, you lived up to my high expectations. Kudos.
o Growth Areas. Astra has quite an interesting history, but seems a bit lacking in personality and quirks so far. What really irritates him? What really motivates him? Both of these could be fleshed out more.
o XP Awards.-- 250pts total

§ Achievement: Completed.
§ Clarity and Layout: Use of headers and boldened bits of key text created excellent clarity. My only caveat is that you may have overused the bold text a tad.
§ Visual Artistry: I very much enjoyed the logo of the librarians and the main character.
§ Storytelling:
§ Bonus Points: Having a background page for more information was a delightful treat. Thanks for putting so much thought into this.


__Rock & Role__

For the most part, a lot of creativity has gone into providing adequete background for these characters so judging them on effort was not a priority for me rather I chose to judge them based on flare and attraction; basically the players ability to sell their character.
I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.


!!Woodstrike

__Fun & Gamesmanship - Woodstrike - Elf~~~30 points__

'What is truly remarkable about him though are his eyes'. I would have loved
to have seen a peek of these..alas..I must use my imagination! His eyes sound
absolutely enchanting and you scored some points for that sir! Nice graghic
bar too!

Reckless is good too and I promise you I will not be RECKLESS with my
points!!!


__Keenness and Zeal - Woodstrike__, I found your tale had much promise. Your description of your powers was novel (especially the many applications of your wood crafting skills), and you gave Len plenty of plot hooks. As well, the way you took the time to look at your place in Elven society, and their view of your sorcerous pursuits stood out. My only disappointment was that your pledge to 'follow up with more' was never forthcoming. Don't be a tease! 100 xp.



__Quality & Standards
· Woodstrike__

o Strengths. Solid storytelling. I really enjoyed reading Woodstrike's story, especially the details of his misadventures with magic.
o Growth Areas. I would like to see a bit more motivation included in your backstory. Also, Meetup has spell check for a reason. Though their spell check is sadly Americanocentric, I still suggest running it on your page.
o XP Awards. -- 250pts total

§ Achievement: Completed.
§ Clarity and Layout: This gnome notes that the web is not paper. It is difficult (especially with my deteriorating eyesight) to read long stretches of text unbroken by headers.
§ Visual Artistry: Nice logo, but it seems too metallic for your characters style and background. I'd like to suggest an alternative, if I may:


Feel free to use it (or not) as you see fit.
§ Storytelling: As I said, your story is a solid one.
§ Bonus Points:


__Rock & Role__

For the most part, a lot of creativity has gone into providing adequete background for these characters so judging them on effort was not a priority for me rather I chose to judge them based on flare and attraction; basically the players ability to sell their character.
I don't believe everyone should have a prize. While they all deserve credit, a reward is only rewarding when it allows ones efforts to shine amongst the rest so only 3 prizes have been awarded.


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